Thanks for sharing with us, JD,
and opening yourself up for criticism. That is brave and commendable.
I can see this is a "work in progress," but I wonder why you chose to devote first and foremost a lengthy and detailed section to song. Is that because song is the first part of worship, or the most important, or most immediate? Or perhaps simply because you already had a significant amount of material on that topic, with which you began to put together the presentation?
For what it's worth, I would begin with your goals up front. I would then try to set forth a theology of worship as developed from a systematic treatment of the biblical material relating to worship, starting with the most primitive and working my way through the biblical material, understanding the developments and changes that occurred over the millenia.
With that as background, and all that material in front of you, you could then set forth that which pertains to today. You could then define worship fully but concisely, which would leave you plenty of room for developing that definition in various subheadings of your paper. You would have a good idea of the biblical balance respecting the material of worship. You would have some idea of what kind of priority Scripture gives to different parts of worship.
After noting the emphasis on song at the beginning of your paper, my next curiosity was where you would deal with the Word and Sacraments (or ordinances--whichever your choice for terminology). I'm guessing those are forthcoming.
Personally, I think the question of style is a final concern, after all the major issues have been dealt with.
Thanks for an opportunity to contribute some small thing to your labors. God's blessings.
